I'm Suppose to Hate You - Comments

Ugh! I want A sequal lol, I'll help brainstorm Ideas I swear

Awww, I'm so sad to see this end.
But hey sequels are good.

ish sad to see it go. But looking forward to sequel.

Blah. they're getting married. and they've gotten the go ahead. that's fantastic. write more soon. pwease?

Another cool chapter. Now the trouble begins. Pete better be nice about this. Just let me know and I'll kick his ass if he's not nice. You know what? I think Pete needs a girlfriend of his own. An evil one. *smirks* that hates Emily. Oooh drama. Fun.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

-Em

I love this story its awesome !

Oooh, me likey dress. Meow.

Okay, so mabe William isn't all bad. I'm still staying on alert, in case this IS a trap.

I found that really sweet, the slightly matching clothes. Is nobody else gonna figure out she's from the opposng clan and confront William, Are they all too scared of William to say anything?

Grrr, Pete's gonna show up and ruin everything isn't he? He better not.

Awww. That's so sweet. He wants to marry her and everything. Pete better not in the way. I'll personally annihilate him if he ruins anything. -glares at Pete-

Personally I wouldn't trust William. He could still be lying to her.

I really like this.
I read all ten chapters just now.
Hope to read more soon.

It's a good thing you can't figure out how my mind works. It wouldn't be as fun if you could.

-Em

A motherfucking trap? I'll kill William. Though not literally. So he's the bad guy? I can never work out how your mind works, so he could turn good in the end.

Update the next chapter soon. Please. :)

Rain

tw!sted.l!fe.:

that was another great chapter....just a tidbit of info, you've got a few words in there that don't make sense, like when she's supposed to imagine the pain, you have the word 'image'...and in the small note, shouldn't it say 'at the place' instead of 'that the place'....hope that helps, not trying to be mean about it...can't wait to see what happens next. =]

And thank you to you too. I love comments. Let's me know someone's reading, and that makes me so thanks.

-Em

Thank you Tephy my dear! :hug:

I love CC.

-Em

Oo okay, read chapter two. Believe it if you may, but I have seen so much growth in your writing from the first time you posted on MCMB! This is a lot better and I don't have anything nit picky to point out.

Great job, my dear! <3

Hey Em :)

Okay, first CC: seems to be a ton of action involved which is, ultimately, great because novelists tend to get stuck in descriptive passages. (Those are boring and useless, in most cases.)

However, I think you should try to use the devices more colorfully! Instead of all this growling, hissing (which you used I think three times in the story--vary vocab), etc., try to expand more motions, movements, and such. It's not all about dialogue.

Also, towards to beginning: baring teeth, not bearing :P

This is for the first chapter -- I'll get on the second one in a sec!

- Teph

Thanks, I'll be sure to fix that. I wasn't awake when I wrote that. I'll be sure not to write anymore chapters when I've been awake for only five minutes.

-Em

that was another great chapter....just a tidbit of info, you've got a few words in there that don't make sense, like when she's supposed to imagine the pain, you have the word 'image'...and in the small note, shouldn't it say 'at the place' instead of 'that the place'....hope that helps, not trying to be mean about it...can't wait to see what happens next. =]

wow, that was a very well written first chapter...i'm intrigued, hope you keep it going! =]