Last Mile - Comments

Update this story, I like where you have it headed. Guadalajara is a really interesting location, and uncommon in many stories, so you took the time to think it over, please continue writing this:)

I love this one. It's reeling me into the story. I even said 'Guadalajara' out loud because I couldn't think it. I love the name though (and since I'm too lazy to click and type...is that a real place in Mexico? XD)
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Pretty interesting storyline. There's a few grammatical errors here and there, but otherwise I like it.

great, i really like it so far. dont forget using spell check, but other than that, its doing really well.

really good story all you need is a new layout. good job(;

its a good one, i like it. if you can, type it up on word to use auto matic spell check. its good, but also try a different layout. otherwise, i really enjoyed it! keep writing

The layouts really difficult to read. I suggest making one so that the readers could read the text.
Other than that it is a good story :)