Unforgivable - Comments

Oh wait. No I didn't. :P

Thanks but I think I finished this story.. O.O

I love this!

It's very edgey!

Update soon please!

:)

thanks. :}

This is rly good

Thanks. :]

this is a really good story :)

thank you SOO much!! :3

Wow! This is really good, and I am not just saing that! I'm so increadibly rubbish at writing and my friends say it's good, and I'm all ways like "No, it's not!" But I just sat on my bed, reading the whole story! It's so disciptive and you get hooked right from the first scentance! :D he he. lol

Thanks!! I have no idea if I'll continue. I hope I do.. I just have a habit of not continueing with stories... I haven't even written the rest to my other story Clubs.. :/

Wow awesome story!!! i love it! please continue !!! i subscribed!!!

Thanks. :3

Cute Story!!! I like it a lot!

I will write a sequel sometime. I'm glad you like it. :) What's OC?? o.o

Gah, is it finished? It isn't is it? I really want more.

Wow! This is awesome! O.O....It's great and really addictive. Aw, feeling for your OC already =3

Thanks and I did realize that as I wrote more of the story. :/ But thanks anyways. :)

I like the idea of the story...but my problem with it is that it was rushed, confusing, and lacked detail. The story could have had more detail in it and it could have been longer if you had taken the time to build Andee and Jake's relationship up more.
In my personal experience, building someone's relationship up in a story makes your readers more antsy and it makes them more keen on the idea of the couple.
Like I said though, I enjoy the idea of the story. You just need to slow down and add more detail to things.
Also, as colorado dreams. said, you should avoid from using *hug*, *tear*, *cry* and that kind of stuff.

But other than that, it's a good idea.

Thanks SO much! I am thinking about making a sequel but I don't know when. :/ Well, I'm SO glad you like it. :)

I'm not much into romance, but I LOVE how you write. It's like reading a journal or peaking into someone's life.
My problem with it was that it was very, very brief. I love to see you write, and without putting in REALISTIC scenes and details it makes me think- WHAT THE HECK HAPPENED?
Keep writing and I hope I will understand and know the characters in a dependable way more.
( I did like how it was like a teenager's mind. Very dramatized and freaked, young and confused. :D)