Feel It. - Comments

Awe. That was so sweet. I kind of hinted that maybe he was blind, but then when she said that he was staring off into nothingness, I confused myself. XD
But, this was adorable, darling (: Good job.

I love this. Its clever, sweet and beautiful. I never would have guessed that they each had a little flaw, but those flaws they didn't care about.

*little squeal noise* I love this. It's beautiful, from the beginning I could almost guess that Tom was blind, just the way you wrote it I could get that. I wouldn't have guessed that Chelsea was blind.

I love how you told the same story three times, from different prespectives, it give it a more intimate feeling, you get to live the same scenario, but once without sight, once without sound, and then once from a distance.

There was one or two little spelling/grammar mistakes, although I'm not quite sure around one,
Her fingers coursed into my hair, and ravage my skull. This one seems just not quite right, I dont know if you mean it like that, it just doesnt seem phrased right.
My pressed myself to him, That one, I feel you just wrote the wrong word or, left a word out.

On the whole it was beautiful, a little cliche at the end with the Angel, but it was beautiful, and it's making me smile bigger than I have of recent.

Bravo.

I don't really like that this has three different perspectives in one chapter. And that the last Point of Veiw is labelled third person, when it in fact is not. I also found somethings to be confusing

However, the concept is great and refreshing, but they were so suddenly given away. I love the layout, I think its gorgeous, and Christmas is such a great thing to write about too. Great descriptions!

I loved this. The concept was brilliant; the way you incorporated the sense of touch had a sense of warm intimacy in my opinion. As I got to the end, I was stunned to find their impairments, but I really thought that made it better. They were united with their sense of touch, one of the things that seemed to bring them together as far as similarities go. Your description was fantastic---I really felt as if I was there watching the whole scene. What a beautiful way for two people to spend Christmas.

Overall, I did adore it. The way you managed to describe things was beyond amazing. Just the very idea of this, the thought you must've put into this short and sweet one-shot, it was spectacular. \

Wonderful job[x

I loved this and I loved the concept. My finger cradled itself into the core of her palm, and rubbed itself over her delicate feature over and over. I absolutely adored this little detail. Not knowing he was blind, I thought it was so sweet.

I do agree with silk tea. I would have liked to have seen it in another set-up, somehow. But either way, I absolutely loved this and you wrote it beautifully.

I feel as if this would do better in three parts. One from his perspective, one from hers and the other in third person. I feel that way we can get the entire feel of everything and not just bits and pieces. I felt that this flowed a little stiffly--while nicely thought out and written, I still think there's room for improvement. Great job. :)

Oh my god, that ending!

I was reading the story, thinking, "Wow, I love the way she reiterates the senses." Then, when I got to the last paragraph, it was like a light went on in my head. That was so clever, I loved it.

I really like the words you used to describe things, like "cradled" and "ravaged." I especially loved when you said "...she was so warm in the winter time." That sentence and the way the words sound together were really nice.

There are a few grammatical errors, especially in the "Chelsea" paragraph, but all in all, it was really cute. Good job. :)

I love this a lot. (:
I thought it was so cute, and then when I got to the last part, I reread it and found it even cuter. I hadn't guessed one was deaf and the other was blind. That makes it so much more beautiful. <3
I loved your descriptions as well. You did a great job. <3