Seventeen Ain't So Sweet - Comments

It would be nice if you continue with this.

I luv this sooooooooo much! I agree wit halle though cause, beside a new hot guy in it, her life is suckin right now

Wow. This is really, really good reading material.

Yeah, my definition of soon got altered by the computer that had everything I wrote for this story on it :/ I'm really sorry about the long wait.

your definition of soon is very long

Favorite chapter! And I don't hate Kaz so much anymore. He seemed so much more -- for lack of a better word -- human in this chapter. He was less of a jerk and more of a guy who also had his whole world turned upside down. Also, I just can't find it in me to hate a guy who blushes. Weird, I know. I'm excited to see what's going on in the mountains, can't wait!

So Halle's... what? Princess of the winged-scaly-humanoid-things? This has taken a surprisingly "Princess Diaries"-esque turn.

Kaz has some serious issues. I mean, sure he has pride for his race, but Halle knows nothing about it. He can't really blame her for resenting basically being thrown into this life she never knew existed.

As usual, this update was brilliantly written. Can't wait for the next one!

So, the spinning has subsided. Thanks for the quick update.
I've still got a ton of questions, but they'll probably be answered when Halle wakes up next chapter.
Can't wait for the next chapter! :D

It's me again!
As I said before, I admire the originality, the surprises and well . . . basically everything.
The only thing I have to criticize is the fact that there's nothing to criticize. WOOH!!
xoxo
Me!!

Goodness, I'm confused. I mean, her dad is from some super secret race of magical killer ninjas, I get that. But what is her mom? And why did her mom lie about her dad's parents? Any why did her mom's mom kill her dad? And is her killer grandma normal, since her mom's dad is magical? What about her dad's dad? Is he dead, too? And where does Blue eyes fit into all of this? Is he actually dead, or does his black blood give him some sort of special life force? Are Halle's grandparents fighting in some magical relm that only they can disappear to? Oh, my. There are a lot of 'moms' and 'dads' and question marks in this comment. Now I've confused myself even more. I can't wait for you to update this, so maybe my head can stop spinning.

I really like this story so far and trust me, I'm picky when it comes to stories. Especially original fiction, it's always hardest to write.

I'm interested in a lot of things, like Steph's criminal record and whether or not there's something between Halle and Ryan. I wonder what happened to her dad and her grandmother, and the connection that ol' blue eyes has in this story. Of course I'm also interested in her whole 'seventeenth birthday tragedy', because I do think it will be that-a tragedy-for her. But what do I know? I'm not the talented writer in this situation, you are.

I love the way you write too, it's sophisticated but it has a distinct teenage tone without the dreadful grammar. The next update will be fantastic, no doubt (:

I love it! Like I do most of your writing. (:
I was reminded a bit of the movie Jumper when Halle saved Steph, I'm curious to see if that was a valid connection or just my brain picking up signs that aren't there...
Also, at this part, I'm not sure what your intention was, but “"Birthday jitters.' I said into my pillow, the words muffled and garbled by the material. It smelled like my head." made me laugh my head off. It's probably a direct result of my immaturity, but I found "It smelled like my head" insanely hilarious. Can't wait for the next update!

Love, LoVE, lOVe, LOVE it!
Your grammar, spelling, paragraphs - dude, I can't pick up a single error, and that's the first thing I look for when reading a story. Very original plot and I admire the fact that no one can assume what's to happen next.
Can't wait for the next update, I'm subscribing!

:) I really like this so far.
I'm glad that you know how to type.
Unlike people who type like this "R u serius?"

I don't know where this is going, so I'm curious to see. Please update. :)

And I saw no grammar mistakes either, so awesome job. :D