Pokemon Adventure - Comments

I love Pokemon, but I didn't like the beginning for some reason. You just jumped right in there and spat it out, and I couldn't believe anything that a person would say that.
I wasn't sent here from comment swap (I got banned. -.-) I just went to the home page and saw the title and read. I'm sorry to be a critique, but I don't find this believable when I read.

I used to love Pokemon. However, I stopped watching it years ago. I can't really remember anything about the anime anymore. -_-"

I like the way you start with this story. ^_^ I imagine that there's a woman voice reading the first paragraph and there's a girl walking next to the guy. LOL! I was just being silly. ^_^

My pokemon are all loyal to me because I treat them well.

Personally, I don't like that sentence. It's nothing against you but I can't help but feeling like Sabrina is being cocky. It's she's all "I treat my Pokemon well so they should be loyal to me." But that's only me. Maybe I read it in the wrong tone. No offense to you.

I definitely love reading the battle scenes. But because I haven't watched Pokemon for years as I stated earlier, I can't imagine how these Pokemons look like. -_-" That really sucks. I can totally imagine the battle but there's only blank figure in the place of the Pokemons.

Comment swap sent me here and even though I'm not a fan of Pokemon your story is very well written and it's nice to actually come across a story that is well written and not full of punctuation, spelling errors and awful grammatical mistakes.

Your layout looks good and is easy to read and I wish you well with your writing

keep going! I love Pokemon!

Yeah Gary is kinda cool isn't he? I was a pokemon fan then I left off and I have no idea what's happening in the pokemon world after ash, may and max team up though I heard he's now met up with Dawn. Your story's kinda cool....though somehow I prefer Ash to be the main character. Keep updating - love to see how it turns out!