Paint My Portrait - Comments

This was absolutely beautiful <3
I really love it.

This, I must admit, is absolutely heartbreaking. I love the interaction between Sam and Max, even though there is very little of it. Max's thought process is clear and realistic, and I like the self hatred parts, because that's what happens, you blame yourself. Your ability to get through the story and transactions of time is amazing, you didn't linger and it was easy to tell when time had passed. Also, you have made the death of a character realistic/sad, it isn't cringe worthy like in some other stories.

I like to the layout too, it's nice and simple but fits with the story perfectly.

Simply beautiful.

First off, thanks for entering this in my contest. :) The layout was absolutely beautiful; the colors went together really well and I loved the banner picture. I've never heard the song that this entry is based off but I'm pretty sure that isn't going to matter a whole lot. :)

I stroke over his lower lip with my thumb. I think that should be stroked. Right off the bat, I felt like I could really relate to this. I find it so hard to take a compliment; I usually feel like people are pitying me, to be honest. This entire piece was really sad; you did a great job at setting up the relationship between Max and Sam; it seemed so realistic. The only real problem I had was at the ending, where you switch from Max addressing Sam as 'him' to 'you.' I just thought I would point that out. :)

Thanks for entering this in the contest!

This was so beautiful...so good.

That was beautifully sad. Good job in making it relate to the lyrics. I like the build up to the end and the whole thing was overwhelmingly sad, but it was very well written and I liked it a lot.

He softly kissed me back, before his hand slit out of mine. I think you mean, 'He softly kissed me back, before his hand slid out of mine.'

That was the only mistake I could find. Nice grammar and punctuation.

I enjoyed the story. :D