Ubiquitous - Comments

I think, as said before, the overall simplicity really brings the story's true "colors" out. See what I did there? - Haha. But it was adorable, and a really nice and unique compared to some of the cliche stories I've read like this. You did outstanding :)

So yeah, I kind of fell in love with this. It was an easy read but that made it so much better. I loved how Red was worried about Blue, and how cute it ended. Such a sweet ending and it made me happy.
The layout is simple, but I enjoy that. It isn't distracting and just adds more to the story. You did such a fantastic job. I'm in love

Pan de muerto:
Layout
I like how simple the layout is: A nice background for the story and a simple-looking banner. At first I wasn’t too fond of the sea-like background you had, but as I read I realized why it is that way, which made me like it, for it ties with the story pretty nicely.

Title
I like the simplicity of it and the meaning. It’s synonym to omnipresent and I like how this relates to Blue and how her presence is influential over Red’s life, even in such a short amount of time.

Content
I like how you set up the narration style focusing on Red but how he diverts this focus to Blue. He talks of her as if he knew her all his life, yet he knows nothing about her, not even her name. I like how such brief and superficial encounters managed to mean something to Red.

I laughed at some of the ridiculous scenarios that he came up with to explain Blue’s absence. I like how this precisely ties really well with the title and how she is ever present in his thoughts.

The scene by the sea also ties in really nicely with the background and it appears like they have a sort of unspoken intimate relationship, not as in boyfriend/girlfriend or something similar, but as if they knew each other already; this can be seen through the interaction they have, the actual first one we as readers see for ourselves, for we’ve been relying on Red’s memories of her.

“I know. It seems like yesterday when you ordered that iced cappuccino and I called you Blue.” I blushed at the second part, which was blurted out accidentally.

This particular part threw me off a little, not because it is badly written, but because it throws away that vibe of familiarity that these two characters have. Here it just seems like a regular guy having a crush on a girl, instead of that vibe I’ve been getting from the rest of the story about these two.

I liked the last bit of dialogue, though. It is funny and it does reflect this vibe of familiarity I’ve been getting from these two characters. I really would have liked it if the story had ended here, because the reflection and the final paragraphs didn’t seem to fit too well with the flow of the rest of the story.

Overall
I liked the story and the relationship your two characters had. They were really well rounded and the dialogue between them flowed nicely alongside with Red’s narration. Aside from the minor things I wasn’t too fond of, I think this is a really nicely written piece with a really beautiful simplicity to it.

Oh jeez, this was urgh.

First off, the layout. Like, I absolutely love it! It so perfectly fits the story!
Second, the story itself. Like. I can't evin. How he was making up scenarios in his head when he didn't even know her name, and when she corrected him about her hair color. Genius!
The descriptions and dialogue and everything was just beautiful. Gorgeous!

This was just amazing. And deserves a recommendation! Good job, really. A very great job with this. <3

As most people have said, this is really cute. I like the idea of red and blue, in the hot and cold sense. Maybe I'm thinking too much into this, but perhaps the colours link in with their personality? Not that Blue/Kennedy is a cold person but more of an unattainable character whereas Red/Ethan is the warmer, love sick, shy kind? Opposites attract kinda thing?

this is so cute<3

I really enjoyed reading this. Recommended it on my profile so other people can enjoy it, too (: I wish you'd write more original stuff, you have a real talent (:

I love this, it's so cute and sweet. It all works well. I love Kennedy's personality, it makes me smile.

Apparently, I'm the first comment in, like, 10 months, so excuse me for that. XD But anyway, this story was wonderful. It was just so cute! :) I don't really know how else to describe it. I could just picture them on the railing, overlooking the beach, and smiling at each other--despite the fact that you didn't even have to use that many adjectives. The layout was very nice, and gave such a great vibe to it! Amazing job--you're a fantastic writer. :)

The amount of cuteness in this story is overwhelming. <33 I love stories where the guy gets the girl in the end and there’s a sort of happily ever after vibe to it. The nicknames were super adorable as well, and I could just picture someone with red hair and blue hair walking down the street together, haha.

“My hair is turquoise, you dolt.” My favourite part. Someone needs to go back to school and learn their colors. ;)

Such a cute little story. Well done. <3 :)

It what so cute, and it was a unique idea. It was nice that it was in a coffee shop. It was as un-cliche as they come. Your character portrayals are wonderful, as is the emotion you convey. I love this. <33

You were right, this was a bit of fluff, but I enjoyed it. It's cute that it all unfolds in a coffee shop - it seems almost cliche but it works well here. I like Blue/Kennedy's attitude; she seems very mysterious and a bit sarcastic, especially when she insults Ethan for calling her hair blue when it was clearly turqouise.

She left the country permanently. She’s in a car wreck. Her boyfriend beat her to death last night. She went on vacation. She hit her head on the sink and has amnesia.
This bit made me laugh so hard. I swear, had I not been laying down already, I would've been on the floor.

Thanks for sugesting this for me
It did cheer me up, made me smile
Beautifully written, i love your writing style, its different, i'll probably check out your other stories since i really loved this one.
<33 :]

I love this, really love this. It's such a breath of fresh air from the usual cliche boy meets girl stories on Mibba. It was such a cute story line and I loved the ending. I think what was really impressive about this story was the characterisation. There was very little dialogue, and very little information given about the charters lives. But there personalities were so strong and believable. I especially loved Blue. This was fantastic. Well done :)

This is really cute. It's really different from other stories that I've read on here :) Thanks for entering it in my contest!

^^^Really, it's a really cute love story. =)

LOVE IT! =D So awesome. =)

Although I didn't like the green writing on the picture, I'd say it was marvelous. And her blue hair was stunning.

I liked this story. It was very invigorating. I like how she tells him to give her a nickname and he sticks by it. I like how they're calling each other by their hair color.

On the last day of summer, I like how he gets worried. I like how he has those worst case scenarios, even though he doesn't really know her.

awe this is cute =)

Why are there no other comments? This is adorable! Personally, I think Blue and Red deserve a full-fledged story. :)