This looks to me like it could be a real hit here on Mibba. So all I can say is keep it up, even though it may not get lots of comments, that doesn't mean it isn't really good work!
Wow... That was absolutely incredible. I'm laughing and tearing up at the same time. I think it's the most beautiful thing I've ever read on this site - the way you combined your own story (really touching by the way) with Jimmy's was mind blowing. The dialogue was really realistic too. Again, I want to be able to express how breathtaking this is but it just isn't going to happen. Sorry about that. If you want to continue it somehow I'd definitely read it. (: