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Its very interesting I like it

I think that this story is a little too fast paced. Maybe explain a little more. There were a few parts where I wasn't sure who's POV it was, so try separating it when the POV changes. Also, there are quite a few mistakes, small ones, but I suggest you go through and fix them. Other than that, I think this story is astounding, please update it soon. C: x