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  • AZNGRL

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    Its very interesting I like it
    September 9th, 2012 at 04:19am
  • DeathbedAtheist

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    I think that this story is a little too fast paced. Maybe explain a little more. There were a few parts where I wasn't sure who's POV it was, so try separating it when the POV changes. Also, there are quite a few mistakes, small ones, but I suggest you go through and fix them. Other than that, I think this story is astounding, please update it soon. C: x
    June 25th, 2012 at 04:41am
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