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Lots of potential! I'd just recommend that you don't put aside the idea of going back and revising. The beauty of this website is that people understand it's a work in progress, so going back to chapters you've already written is perfectly fine :3 keep on writing!

I like this a lot! It's really not something I would probably normally read, but I decided to give it a chance anyway, and I'm glad I did! You're a really good writer, and you've got really great characterization and plotlines. Awesome job, keep up the good work!! :D

Thanks and I will do my best to fix all of these problems!

I really love this story, and I want you to update, but I just have two issues: some general grammar problems and not using second person (you) unless it's in a quote.

I was just talking and craving sushi today lol. I don't know how I feel about Alejandro...I miss Kellen. Can't wait for more :)

Ooo. Kellen should know girls can find things out that guys don't think they know :) Can't wait for more :)

I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS STORY! KEEP WRITING!!