The Resistance - Comments

You've gotta keep writing I'm hooked haha :D

The prologue has gotten me hooked, bb. For real, I am awe struck. It's so mysterious and I want to know more! So much more! You've done a great job. This is very original, by the way. Also, I want to say you ended it perfectly. "Your wife and kids are dead."

Totally messed up. I'm all for sad, tragic, horrifying stories. You've got a new subscriber right here. <3

I agree the prologue is mysterious and sucks you in right away. It's not like other fan-factions where the writer gets hooked up with the celebrity, this has more thought put into it and is very original.
I read all four chapters today and there were a few parts that were a bit iffy but nothing major.
Your a brillant writer so keep up the good work!!

Ohh and I looooove Muse too! <3
Dominic is my favourite, he's a little hottie. :P

In the words of Peter Griffin... This is frickin' sweet.

I can't even describe how flaily and awesome this made me feel when I saw it. I practically had a heart attack. But seriously, now.

This is a fantastic idea. The layout is wonderful and the writing - as usual - is superb. I'm so excited for the rest of this. You have no idea.

<3

Oh wow. The layout, the banner! that's really something. Very nice.

Okay, so about the story. I enjoyed it. Like, I enjoyed it to oblivion.
“Your wife and kids are dead.” - everything about it, drew me in. And the last line is just...!!

So I love your descriptions, they were very enthralling. xD If you know what I mean...
I think some of the things you said might not have been necessary, but meh. I liked the story all the same.

Great job!

The banner & layout for this story are exquisite. Just saying.

Anyway, that was a magnificent prologue, the last couple of lines really drew me in, and made me wonder/guess what the future plot line would be. This sounds like the start fo an amazing story (:

I like this, it's written well and it's interesting. Sometimes you use to many short sentences but that may just be me.
the layout is really nice, i like the banner especially. You also make the atmosphere very questioning and mysterious with the dark layout.

I like this. o.o

The storyline is very interesting. And I adore the banner and layout.
Very nice work. :]

I like the banner and layout, it gives it kind of a dark feel. The title does as well, so it all matches.

I like the begining, he has such a good attitude for the previous things that have happened to him
Yet, I can tell he is a saracstic character as well.
I'm curious to see who this guys he hates so much is, and why he's almsot died seven times
he's tlaking about herself as if she were a different sepcies, it makes me wonder
aww his wife and kids are dead! that's so sad :(

I'd say this is a pretty good introduction :)

The FC references did kind of ruin it?

Anyways! I really loved the banner and layout, the typing to the resistance was a really great effect for the gif.

I felt that it was really choppy, but a great introduction nevertheless. The details were great, but a lot of sentences could have been combined to try and dissolve the texture bringing me in and out of the characters world. Make sense?

Lovely.

The banner is just wow. Honestly.
The prologue, which is all you've wrote so far, I think is amazing. The way it's wrote, the way you don't know what it is all about but it's suspenseful making you want to read on to find out.
I actually don't know how it was a FC reference; never seen/read it before. So I can't comment about that.

I agree with silk tea, the FC reference was random and wasn't needed. I had a flow going when I was reading this, seems very interesting and I will keep an eye out for more chapters.

I agree with dear Leo up there but I on the other hand feel that the FC reference kind of ruined it. It just kind of...came out of nowhere and was like what does that have to do with anything? I feel like you could've expressed what you wanted without that reference. But otherwise, this is fantastic. I really enjoy what you've written here. :)

As far as prologues go, this is excellent. It's intriguing and mysterious which is, if you ask me, just what a prologue should be. Your language and descriptions are great and you've made me really want to dive deeper into what exactly is going on. My only suggestion would be to switch around the first sentence. Put the part about not regretting anything first; that'd be a great opening line.