July 21st, 2011 at 05:17am
Thank you for entering my contest! To begin with, I adore the layout. It is very well done and I always find that a good layout improves the story, if that makes sense. xD
The idea for this is so unique and adorable. I freaking love Nutella, in small amounts.
“I didn’t gobble it up,” Frank said lazily, rolling his eyes. “Turkey’s gobble stuff up. I loved that line! It actually made me laugh. :D I noticed one little mistake, nothing really serious but:
Too be honest, I don’t think I’ll be growing taller anytime sooner.”
That should be to, not too. I really liked how you used the prompt. I envisioned it as something depressing but you used it in a very humorous way. The last paragraph of the story was perfect as well. Poor Frank! Thank you very much for entering in my contest and good luck! :D
long live the nutella, all that chocolate-y goodness and the sugar rush that follows. It is advertised as being low gi but we all know they lie!
Love
Jess