When You've Got a Good Thing - Comments

Your story is great! It's very descriptive and the dialogue is believable and good. The characters are dynamic, it's a great story all around.

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I'm not in this fandom at all so I can't comment as to how accurate their personalities are, but these characters seem sweet. You can really feel the love between the two. I agree with earlier comments that say there's a lot of dialogue and not much action. I think a setting or even a few more descriptive elements could really elevate this story.

On the other hand, the chapters are short and to the point, which is nice. I did laugh a bit at the dialogue. The party scene especially made it clear this is a family, rather than just friends.

From what little I know of the band, I'm surprised but moreso please Taylor didn't pick out some crazy goth dress or the wedding didn't end up in a cemetery or something.
(The dresses were all so beautiful too!)

I loved the little hints of the past; the fighting, the anger, etc. It added more layers, but it was nice to not see a relationship from start to finish. I liked the acknowledgement that no couple is perfect, but it doesn't matter in the end. This story might just be a snapshot in this couple's lives, but it ended with a fairytale wedding, like every little girl dreams of.

All that being said, I think this was really well done, short and sweet and emotional.

Alrighty, I read the last chapter you have posted and I thought it was pretty good. I feel like you could use more details though. It's kind of dialogue with very little explanation of where things are going. But the chapter is really short and so it is kind of hard to add it in. That's one thing that I have a problem with too and it takes work to try and fix it. Good luck!

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I've enjoyed the story so far, I'm relatively familiar with the A7X (RIP Rev <3) fandom since I've been listening to the band for years now. It was nice to see something show up on comment swap that I knew I'd enjoy!

Focusing now though, overall it was interesting. I couldn't help but chuckle and/or laugh at points in the story. In an earlier comment about dialogue, they're correct there's no need to capitalize the letters after a quote unless a new sentence is started along with not having to start a new paragraph after dialogue. It's okay though, it took me a while to get used to not starting new paragraphs.

Well, keep up the good work! :)

I'm not familiar with this fandom - but I love your characters and what a way to open your story! Sounds like this wedding will be a raucous affair. Love, love, love those dresses you picked out! Should be interesting to see how this plays out the closer the wedding gets!

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I'll just first let you know that I'm not too familiar with this fandom.

Your dialogue isn't written quite right. You shouldn't capitalise the words after dialogue unless you are starting a new sentence. The following is one sentence:

“Matt,” She groaned, hating what he was doing to her and loving it all at the same time. “We’re going to be late.”

That should be:
“Matt,” she groaned, hating what he was doing to her and loving it all at the same time, “we’re going to be late.”

You need to capitalise if you start new sentences:
“Matt.” She groaned out loud and hated to love what he was doing to her. “We’re going to be late.”

Also, you don't need to start a new line after dialogue. You only need to start on a new line when someone else begins speaking, or when you are starting a new paragraph:

"Hey Sally," I said, and sat down. She was looking lovely, but I tried not to stare.
"Hey Matt." Her voice was like silk.

I can't say much on the content because I haven't read the prequel so I've no idea what's going on, except that they're getting married. You seem to write with a lot of dialogue, and not a lot of description. There's not a lot of emotion in this story, coming fromt he characters. They don't appear to feel anything. It's very "she said this and then I did that so we went here and then I said this..." There's no "she said this, probably because of this reason, and then we went here, and I thought this about it. I said this because I felt that..." You know? Message me if that doesn't make any sense. It's 5 in the morning, so I apologise.

On the up side, this means that your plot is very clearly set out. Just, there's no emtional reasons behind it.

Well, I rather like this story (: I haven't read the prequel yet, but I'll get round to it eventually xD It kinda helps that I'm a sucker for anything to do with Avenged (if I had my way, they'd all be in cages in my bedroom, naked) :P One day, I'll get to read all of it, I swear :D

btw, dress 2 is my favorite!

me happy(:

I realize this is late as fuck, but I haven't been on Mibba that much so I'm just barely getting to comment on this. And I wanted to tell you that I fucking love this story already! No matter what you write, it always has that little Hannah twist to it that makes it completely amazing. Plus, I'm excited as fuck about Taylor and the Hulk getting married. :D Hahaha, yeahhh, that makes me laugh my ass off. And dude, a Disney wedding would be fucking incredible!
Gahhh, I hope you post more of this soon. I miss your stories and you as well, you sexy beast! <3

Awesome :D

Great update :)

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That was cute! I think its adorable that Zina is helping her out with the wedding...
Especially the Disney-theme! :)
Can't wait for more!

HEEE <3

Welcome back? :D

I cannot wait for you to update this again! :D
please update soon! <3

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awesome chapter :]

I'm in love with all of your stories <3
please update soon! <3<3<3

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i like it..... hahahaha..... oh yeah......... ;)..... anyway you got the 'speak now' cd???? my sister has it.... i dont think its that bad, just a little like taylor swift has a lot of guys break up with her..... hhmmmm..... XD

*raises hand* FUCK YEAH! I'm excited! xD

more more more more more more more more more more more more more!(:
I love you babe!