Everybody Dies; It's Just a Matter of When and Where - Comments

ugh, this was so brilliant.
i love your writing so much <3

That was very very good. Made me cry though. At the end. Just imagining that man die is horrible. :( not your typical fanfic. I loved it!!

Dasha, I have to warn you. This is going to be a very long, very detailed comment, because I have failed to comment on any of the three chapters of this amazing piece of work that you’ve written. So I really hope you like those kinds of comments, because it’s what you’re getting.

In the first chapter, you amazed me. You wrote one other story about assassins, I believe, and this was just as stunning as that other one, of which the name is now somehow evading me. The characterization you gave Danielle and Zacky right from the get-go was just…amazing. It was so layered and carefully planned out, and you have each of their personalities down to a perfect little t. I also loved how you explained the fear of planes and the statistics. The way you wrote that was simple, but it was also profoundly complex in its own sort of subtle way, and I just…loved it. I like how you originally brought Danielle in as this whimsical, ‘don’t-give-a-shit’ kind of girl who also saw life for what it truly is, and embraced that life to the fullest. She’s a character that’s more mature than Zacky in many ways, but also a little less mature in others. I love how they balanced each other out throughout these three chapters, and I can simply say I was heartbroken when she was killed. And when I say heartbroken, I mean it in the best possible way. You’ve moved me to tears with this story; both when Danielle died, and then Zacky’s reaction to her death, and finally, when Zacky committed suicide in the third chapter. I can see this being made as a movie, and everything just meshes together in my mind like that. I see it all happening, I can hear the emotion and depth in the dialogue, and the contrast of everything to make it so much more profound than just a simple fanfic.

Your grammar and spelling is good, too. There were hardly any mistakes; none that were noticeable unless I looked back twice, which I only did because I wanted to reread such a beautiful story. Everything just matches together so wonderfully. Everything is so…amazing in this story, and it truly deserves more than the few excellent comments that it’s gotten. I still can’t get over how amazing this story was, and is, Dasha. It’s beautiful in a lot of different ways, and if you look close enough, you can come away with a message too—which a lot of fanfics don’t have. From this, the reader can learn to truly appreciate life, just the way that Danielle did. It’s stunning. Great job on this piece of art, Dasha. I can’t wait to see more of your stuff, like always, because you’re such a great writer. ^_^

I love your layout and your banner it goes well with the story .
I like the a7x story , few spelling errors but i dont mind them like others do .
Very good description and the summary is perfect.

I like your style of writing a lot. While I absolutely despise all stories based on A7X, not because of the content or writers but just because they're so overdone--you have a nice thing going here. There were a few spelling errors here and there but other wise no major grammar issues. Honestly, in my opinion, I would refrain from calling him 'Zacky'...to me that just sounds so...egh, it doesn't sound right. It just sounds off somehow. But otherwise, planes scare the crap out of me too. Did you know that your likeliness to die on a train is like 10.3% higher than on a plane or something like that.