Strings - Comments

LOVE THIS

this is really cool. i mean, i think she's so mysterious and fierce! i really like it! xx

I love this story so far. I adore your characters, especially Elijah, he seems like such a nerdy guy and it's great. Charlotte so so mysterious and interesting, I'm excited to see what happens with her.

I LOVED the summary, it was fantastic. It drew me in immediately and I really wanted to see how you related it to the story.

I love how you wrote Elijah, and wrote out all of his thoughts as part of the narration. It really made him a realistic and relatable character.

I did find a few mistakes:
and to watch out for just sitting in the middle of the road.
You missed a word in there.

If I had waited a few second longer to step onto my brake pedal
Second should be seconds

Then we’re going to dry you off oat my house, okay?
Oat should be at

This story really is amazing, and I hope you continue to write it!

great narration. can't wait for more!

I wish I could write more of a comment, but this is brilliant. I'm in love.

This sounds like a great story! It's actually quite a unique idea, really. I've never read a story like this before, and I can't wait for the next chapter. I love how in the summary you didn't just say 'people grow old and die'. You like... made it visually intriguing, so to say. Great job!

Your summary really drew me in. Elijah is written very well; he's very believable. I like your layout and descriptions. I'm definitely subscribing to this; I'm really curious to see where this plot line goes. It's very unique and interesting. Good work! :)

I adore this! It's unique and interesting. I've never read another story like this. Cannot wait for more!

Intriguing, and one of the few stories written that didn't just state obvious cliches. Keep 'em coming!

This looks interesting! Looking forward to it :)