We're Concentrating on Falling Apart. - Comments

  • Jack.Barakatt

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    This was beautiful. <3
    April 19th, 2011 at 09:43pm
  • Slytherin

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    :'D keep writing flapjack teehee X100
    amazing as always
    February 11th, 2011 at 11:42pm
  • meckie

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    Aww :/
    January 30th, 2011 at 11:00pm
  • kaul hilo

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    Aww, that's so sad. I noticed three mistake. One where you've accidentally done two full stops both spaced from each other. Another with dialogue, where you've put He said "Thanks, Sky." and... Well, I think it should be He said, "Thanks, Sky," and... You know? And where you always put defiantly, instead of definitely. But this was brilliant, I could feel the emotion and it was so realistic, not sure what to make of the characters yet but I can't wait for more.
    January 30th, 2011 at 11:00pm
  • kaul hilo

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    I can't wait for this :D
    December 29th, 2010 at 04:05pm