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  • Shawn Ashmore

    Shawn Ashmore (250)

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    Absolutely amazing! Congrats on your linguistic skills ;)
    October 7th, 2011 at 12:58pm
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    I am judging for the contest :D This story was pretty good - especially all the detail. It was simple and I loved how you described everything. You seem to be a really good writer! There is only one thing though - I think a lot of your sentences are short. If you join up some of the sentences it would probably flow better. Other than that, I really liked this.

    If you'd like to know what points you got, please message me. Check into the contest to see the winners soon! :)
    January 29th, 2011 at 12:11am
  • glenharris

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    wow, very creepy atmosphere, good detail and i think you got all your tenses right!! Yay
    I thought you said you werent good at 3rd person. Carry this on, please :)
    January 9th, 2011 at 11:29pm
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