Greed - Comments

Aw, I felt bad for the girl!

But I really liked your writing. It was just descriptive enough to flow well without looking like you were trying hard. And you really conveyed greed with this whole thing. The man seems very greedy, with the way he left the poor girl without a job.

But good job, I like the writi.g. :3

I love the layout :P

Anyway, I love how you've portrayed Greed in this. It actually fits so well; it's like you were meant to write it. You did so well with it, I just can't even....>.< Good job. You're getting five of five Synclayre stars <3 Nicely done.

The evil boss. Everyone thinks their boss is evil, and this girl happens to be right. It immediately captured my attention and held it throughout. I was impressed by how much you could put into so little. Your descriptions were very subtle, but it was done in a way that made me want more. And... only three people posted a final product, so you kind of automatically made it to the final round haha. I will be posting that very soon, and I will let you know okay? :D

I love your layout, first of all.
And I quite liked this too! It's an...interesting, compact little concept that I'm going to have to think about a bit more.
Your narrative flow is lovely, as is your charecterization.
Overall, nice job!