February 21st, 2011 at 03:23pm
This was cute! I love happy endings and this one really hit the nail on the head! :) I would have suggested maybe putting the deathbat in the background because it was hard to read the words overtop of it, and the blue font was a little hard on the eyes. Also, you had a few spelling mistakes and run on sentences, but nothing too major.
I loved how you tied in the element of surprise that Christmas seems to bring. I thought you did a wonderful job of expressing their true emotions so that the reader could actually feel them. My favourite part was when she opened the door and Zacky was just standing there dressed as Santa. It was so funny. :P
Wonderful entry! :D
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