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  • iJigglyPuff

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    Goddamnit. UPDATE.
    November 10th, 2012 at 10:29am
  • Sammy-Poo!

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    Your writing is really good! Good grammar, good spelling :) The story seems pretty interesting, and I like how it immediately jumps into the action at the start. It does kind of jump around a lot which is sort of confusing, but all in all it's good. I would just recommend adding a little more detail when you're writing a scene, just so the readers can picture it better in their heads :)
    Good luck!
    September 2nd, 2012 at 05:06am
  • Snow Horror

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    Update Soon <3!!!!!!
    August 21st, 2012 at 07:13am
  • Snow Horror

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    "Christopher Starr! Do not eat with your mouth full." hehehehehehehehehe
    August 21st, 2012 at 06:50am
  • JessLoui

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    I freaking love this story...that is all :)
    April 19th, 2012 at 09:24am
  • garrett hedlund;

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    Update Soon <3
    March 31st, 2012 at 06:31am
  • DetonatorDangerHeart

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    My fav is Ollie. I really like this and I hate SOPA
    February 20th, 2012 at 12:45am
  • Nickyy15

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    GO ON PLEASE! Please please please! :) It's just getting good!
    February 3rd, 2012 at 05:52am
  • Lets Run Wild.

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    I wanna smack both those boys! How can Chris not see that he loves Ollie? And how can Ollie posibly think leaving him is a good idea? D: But whoo update!
    Oh and about the SOPA thing, whoever thought of that can go suck themselves repeatedly until they choke(:
    January 19th, 2012 at 06:24am
  • polka dot perfection

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    step one: admit you love your brother
    step two: make out with your brother
    step three: don't let him leave!

    loved chapter. more!!!
    January 19th, 2012 at 04:10am
  • Austin Ashby

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    Yay! Acknowledgement! I'm fucking pissed about SOPA! They need to stay outta the fucking way and stop trying to purify this fucking world! We're just going to find different ways to rebel against authority anyways, so why even try?!
    Anyways. Update! Woo! Ollie is leaving? ...What?! I understand where he's coming from, though. He is old enough to move out, and Christopher hasn't really given him any signs that he likes him like that (what brother would?). I dunno. I hope they work things out. Even if both the brothers are sad.
    Update soon!
    January 19th, 2012 at 04:07am
  • SingingSinner

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    MAH PAGE!!
    January 19th, 2012 at 04:01am
  • SingingSinner

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    it makes sense but at the same time it's absolute fuckery
    and the chapter was saddening
    January 19th, 2012 at 04:01am
  • Under the Stars

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    Grrrrrrrrrrrrrr, my computer didn't tell me about this update... Anyway, I'm glad you updated because I really missed this story. I have to say this is one of my favorite stories on Mibba. Please keep it up and update soon. :)
    December 29th, 2011 at 12:05am
  • SingingSinner

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    awwww poor Oliver :( dont cry :,(
    December 24th, 2011 at 12:56am
  • SingingSinner

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    i am in strong like with this freaking story and even though its on hiatus i will subscribe in just in case you guys continue it
    December 23rd, 2011 at 08:26pm
  • Nickyy15

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    Please go on. :)
    December 23rd, 2011 at 07:03am
  • Nicole_789

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    I love love this
    July 2nd, 2011 at 02:53pm
  • tommo.

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    I'm so hooked!! You guys need to update this shizz!
    PS: I don't really like Derik :/
    July 2nd, 2011 at 05:40am
  • xMonochromexMelindax

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    P-.......
    Please update?
    I just---
    Please update?
    I really can't wait for the next chapter, aha. This story is really well written, and I like it a lot so far!
    The only thing I've noticed is that earlier you said Claud didn't have a cell, but now he does? Aahaha. You could just be like "Oh, yeah, he got his cellphone after the amusement park incident >_>" in the next chrischapter or something.
    June 26th, 2011 at 02:03am
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