Okay. Here we go. (You best feel loved Jenn - I never seriously comment unless i like the author)
Anyway. This was well written. You have promise of talent. Just one thing, you need to spell check before you post. Now I know you'll probably hate me for saying it but yeah.
As for the content itself? It has a really interesting theme. The purpose isn't to tell you who the person is, or why they're taking pills or seeing severed heads inthe bathtub - its about their reactions to the pills or the head. I like that.
I also like the apathetic feel the stories have. It makes them even more weird and chilling than they already were. The fact that the character is just like "Oh hey. Severed head in my bathtub." made the story hilarious.
In the pills one, maybe you could add in a bit about how the pills make the world around him seem. Pills always affect the senses in some way. If you don't want to thats cool (this is after all your story, I'm just making suggestions. :] ), but I think that descriptions of how the room spins, or the walls are technicolor, or of the demons that are appearing in the gloom wouldmake the one-shot a little more....personal.
All in all though, I loved them. Brilliant job Jenn. :] :arms:
Love it!!..lol as i do all your stories. its random but hey random makes great. keep it truckin girl you might come out w/ other body parts around the house...^^
Anyway.
This was well written. You have promise of talent. Just one thing, you need to spell check before you post.
Now I know you'll probably hate me for saying it but yeah.
As for the content itself? It has a really interesting theme. The purpose isn't to tell you who the person is, or why they're taking pills or seeing severed heads inthe bathtub - its about their reactions to the pills or the head.
I like that.
I also like the apathetic feel the stories have. It makes them even more weird and chilling than they already were. The fact that the character is just like "Oh hey. Severed head in my bathtub." made the story hilarious.
In the pills one, maybe you could add in a bit about how the pills make the world around him seem. Pills always affect the senses in some way. If you don't want to thats cool (this is after all your story, I'm just making suggestions. :] ), but I think that descriptions of how the room spins, or the walls are technicolor, or of the demons that are appearing in the gloom wouldmake the one-shot a little more....personal.
All in all though, I loved them.
Brilliant job Jenn. :] :arms: