To tell, or not to tell. - Comments

I started reading this before I discovered that it's been a long while since you've updated. I really hope you'll continue to write it!

I started this thinking that it probably wouldn't appeal to me, but lo and behold, I couldn't stop reading. A few parts were a bit too slow (info dumps are rarely enjoyable), but otherwise, I'm really liking the narrative thus far. You write with the emotion and inner monologuing that I wish I could, and you do it quite well.

I'd recommend doing a bit more editing when you get the chance, though. There are quite a few typos and misplaced commas and the like, and a few chapters could use a bit of tightening up. Also, I hope this doesn't sound too rude, but your author's notes are kind of awkward, considering the content of the story. It wouldn't hurt to shorten them or take them out entirely, just to keep the mood going.

Other than that, though, I really do like this story. I think it's one of the first I've read all the way through on Mibba, and I don't regret a second of it! Really, I found myself most interested in it when Ashley appeared. I don't know why, but I really, really like her. And when she kissed the narrator...Ack! I was stupidly excited. I can't wait to see what happens with the two of them, if anything happens at all. I loves me some lady loving. :p

Anyway, I apologize for all of my rambling! I hope you get the chance to update soon, but even if you never update again, thank you for a fantastic read. :)

I've been waiting for you to update this! ^.^ It's about time, girl. Now, what happens at this party? *suggestive wink* xD

This is perhaps the most truthful, incredibly honest thing I've ever read. It isn't one of those flicks just trying to impress somebody, or one of those things that annoy you after a while because it just doesn't relate. Not saying that I exactly relate to this, but the morality and emotions are so vivid that I felt like this girl was telling me the story. It's the way a person would feel inside, and, I think, that's what makes me like this so much.
On another note, does she have a name?
=3

I mean the not vutting yourself. *is socially awkward*

Good for you. Glad yo like it.

i like this :) im not sure where its going but it sounds a bit like me from a few months ago "they'd be better off" :P i never cut myself though..

;) Well, I know what's going to happen so... wait and see. Also, thank you for the correction! I'll be sure to change it.

;) Well, I know what's going to happen so... wait and see. Also, thank you for the correction! I'll be sure to change it.

;) Well, I know what's going to happen so... wait and see. Also, thank you for the correction! I'll be sure to change it.

Hey i read through your story and couldnt find any mistakes! The only mistake I found was in chapter three in the last paragraph were you accidently wrote ...time fro school rather than time for school. great story though! i hope this girl gets better mentally :)

Thank you for subscribing. I've already put more up and am working on even more! :D

awesome! i subscribed!

This sounds familiar... hahaha
I wanna read more!!!