The Golden Hour - Comments

You did amazing. That's my review. Amazing. I found absolutely no fault in this short story what-so-ever. I don't think anyone, could have captured this idea any better than you did. The ending was a very great surprise. You fit everything together and even jumping between flashbacks and scenes, you did absolutely wonderful. Great job.

First off, I love the banner, and the layout in general. It looks great. (:

Second off, SECOND PERSON OHMAHGAWWW.
I love second person. That intro thing there was great.

The descriptions in this are stunning. One that really stood out to me: Start from the beginning, when I still had the sunshine in my eyes. Wow. That line is gorgeous.

This whole story is gorgeous, really. Palahniuk must have a wonderful effect on you. I loved how you kept using the same words to describe Gracie and Jesse; the naivety and the detachment; I love feelings of symmetry in stories. And the song and the golden time of day, it just all tied up together and related and just, wow. This was great. The ending was a surprise, and the flashbacks fit perfectly and the whole plot was basically just amazing. What a joy to read.

That was such a beautiful and unique story. It had me on the verge of tears at the end, very touching. Wonderful work.