The First Quintette Twin Vampire - Comments

I would also like to add, whenever I read it, only the last chapter had actual color for the wording that you can see on the white background. If you are hiding the words for some reason that is fine but if it is not intentional please at least make the letters not white in the beginning chapters. Sure you can highlight them to read but it can get annoying.

A great start! I look forward to reading more! A quick tip though! You should really separate the dialogue from the paragraphs, it'll make it easier to read.

Not that bad.

You guys should really read this story, it's really good.