Thanks Karma. - Comments

Honestly, this story was kind of confusing to me. There are some contradictions in there, like first he says he left Sarah and the next moment it is as if Sarah left him. And the way Marina acts is kind of strange as well, in my opinion. I guess this is just not my kind of story.

I do like the way you write, being all descriptive. There are a few grammatical mistakes in there, but nothing that bothered me all too much.

I also like how you incorporated the picture into the story. I definitely isn’t the easiest picture to write about, but I think you did a very good job on that.

You know I'm not really sure what to think of this.
Not in a bad way. Maybe not what I was expecting, but in a good way.
I liked how you ended it though. Because by how you wrote it like he thought she was so great,
but in the end, she kind of ends up being a bitch. It was a twisted ending, I liked it.
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