The Passenger's Seat - Comments

I really love the layout and I love the banner. :) Good job on that! The first chapter is really good. You are very good at describing things and telling the story. I will be coming back for more. This is amazing.

This is just lovely.

Your characterisation is just fantastic. You're great at using the "showing, not telling" rule and from the first few paragraphs I felt that I already knew Garrett very well, even though I had only seen a bit of what he did or thought. I also loved how you introduced the characters slowly throughout the story, giving the reader a bit of time to get to know each one before we were introduced to someone else.

I also adore your description. Not only does it sound lyrical and flowing, but you are also able to incorporate humour into it! One for my favourite lines was:
"She nodded briefly; eyeing the store’s broken neon sign that read ANALS instead of CHANTAL’S with a somber face on."
That was just epic.
The way you write intimacy is also amazing. It sounds so natural and normal and comfortable to read, rather than sound awkward or forced.

I love it! It's absolutely fantastic.

I love this. The layout is cute, the story was great. One of the best stories that I've read on here in a long time.

I loved the end, when he took her to the pool, it was my favorite part. And you added Cobra Starship into the story :) I love them! I also laughed when he was in the store and the clerk freaked out on him when she ran out of the store.

Great story! I really enjoyed reading it. :)

PS- You are a really good writer <3

This was really beautiful. It definitley made me go 'Awww' I thought it was romantic and it made me happy. I adore love stories. The characters were great and realistic. The story over all was not cliche which is always a plus. I don't think there's that many other stories on here that I have liked more than this one.

Loved it.

Loved it.

This is really good. Just, can you please put the link to my contest on the summary page?