Bailey then noticed a small list of numbers at the top of the paper that turned out to be a date. 10-27-09. I just wanted to point out the date. :] But I loved this chapter!<3 Greatttt!
This is very good. I liked it but I did notice that in some of the sections you needed some commas but other then that i thought it was very good. I'm just saying my own opinion right now but I think it would been a little bit cooler if you told it in her point of view and how she viewed everything and what her emotions were, but hey that's just me.