I won't say I particularly love the idea for your story, but you write quite well, except for over-use of commas. Okay, I am a bit harsh at times, your writing is fantastic. I certainly can't write this well. Please continue the story, if you keep it up, I'm sure lots of people will become intrigued and will continue to read it. You have a way of writing that compells people to continue reading it.
January 26th, 2011 at 12:16pm
