Rage - Comments

So at the end of chapter 4 I was quite scared, haha.

I think Christian's like the typical guy, minus his evident problems. He doesn't wanna admit he misses her and basically does everything in his power to push that notion out of his head. Like drinkin' and playing video games.

The last updated chapter really has me interested and scared like I said.

Christian's got a creepy but mysterious sort of vibe. And it's nice that he's got Joel by his side to help him along the way.

On a critique note, I'd suggest you re-read your chapters at least once or twice before posting that way to pinpoint mistakes. Small tiny ones such as misspelled words or punctuation marks that aren't there or shouldn't be there. Like I said all you need to do is just re-read em to fix that problem.

I like this story it's intriguing and creepy.

@ Death The Angel

Yeah, I have a talent for writing my characters into the darker side of life unfortunately, haha. But his base character is just too excellent to ignore in my opinion.

I'm glad you liked it, I was almost about to give up on this story. :D

Oh wow, so I finally finished reading this and I really love it, I can't wait to see where you take this but I really love Christians personality, he's really different compared to the usual stereotypical guy and I love the mysterious aura he gives off.

You're right though, I wouldn't use his dark side in The Hummingbird but I loved seeing that side of him, it was intriguing!

I really enjoyed this, I must say it was your use of a simple title which was also straight forward that caught my eye, I also like seeing how your banner photo also fits into the story dynamic.

Content wise… one thing that kept me entertained was that it was easy to read and understand while still keeping emotions and reactions well detailed and realistic. I'm curious to see how you plan to continue this.

First off the layout is amazing! It really captivates the tone of your story and it's also very easy to read. I read the first chapter and I really enjoyed it. The argument between the two was very believable and was written very well. I could almost feel the emotions and pain the two were feeling. Joel seems like a really lovely guy and I'm excited to see where it goes. I'll read the next chapter when I get a chance (:

@Skarsgard of Sweden

Thank you :) That kind of just made my day

This is amazing. I love the detail you put in to the story. I love how he isn't the typical crying sort of thing. He just destroys something and then doesn't admit his feelings. It is very believable. You make the the characters seem real. I like it.

This is amazing. I love the detail you put in to the story. I love how he isn't the typical crying sort of thing. He just destroys something and then doesn't admit his feelings. It is very believable. You make the the characters seem real. I like it.

@ptvjaime

Joel is actually based off my boyfriend, Joel

Yeah, Im trying to create a build up situation.

Thankyou so much for the feedback! :D

This is actually really good. I feel like he and I would get along well post break-up just because we both do the same things. I'm also intrigued by the way he puts his emotions on the back burner instead of it turning into angst. Tearing up the paper was genius too. I can't wait to see where this goes. And I love Joel. He's a sweet guy.