January 27th, 2011 at 01:28am
wow.
this is so raw and real and I totally commend you for laying your heart out there and letting your walls down to share this all with us. That takes guts hun, so props for you on that one!
I also want to add that both guys seem like real douchers and you could do better than both of them :)
one critique, dont write it all together. Separate the story every few sentences or so. It just makes it easier to read.
Other than that, amazing job sweetie!
XD
I just wanna say that it would be a lot easier on the eyes if you got a layout that wasn't white in background.Some computers don't numb down the whiteness of the screens and it takes a toll on the human eye, especially eyes that need glasses.
I went out on a limb to read this and i found it interesting. Keep writing!