False Relationships Seem So Transitory - Comments

As a start, your layout is absolutely gorgeous. Pastels can sometimes be a little overwhelming but you found a perfect balance with the coloring. The one line summary worked perfectly as well; I can already tell there's going to be heartache ahead.

I've never read an Alice and Bella, but it seems like it could be very possible. In those first two paragraphs, I actually felt more sorry for Jasper than for Alice. This might be because he's my favorite character in the series but I can't help but wonder if he knows about Alice's feelings for Bella.

When I first saw Bella that fateful day in the cafeteria of Forks High School, I made sure to laugh and smile as much as possible, so that maybe she'd fall in love with my smile, just like I fell for hers. That line was heartbreaking. Now I feel sorry for Alice.

I loved the style of writing you used for this; the writing seems delicate, in a way, more like Alice herself. That word 'dainty' to describe Bella's veins was a good example.

That last line... actually brought tears to my eyes. What if Bella had never moved to Forks? What if she had left Edward? You have me rewriting the Twilight series in my head now. xD One other thing about this story is that, if you felt like it, you could look at it from different perspectives. I, personally, would be interested to see it from Jasper's point of view, although that would most likely make me cry.

Overall, I have nothing negative to say about this story. The layout was gorgeous (loved the divider), the story was heartbreaking and your writing was seamless and free of any grammar or spelling mistakes. I adored it. (:

I love your writing skills. You are an amazing writer. I love the background design and even the little symobls you put in between the text. The way you described Alice, was amazing. How you made her feel like Jasper didn't made her feel the way Bella did. I do agree with Opus 28, that last line was very heart breaking. Also, the words you used to describe the setting made me feel like I was there in Alice's shoes. I am also like Opus 28 fangirling all over this story. <3 :)

That was so sweet, and so fluffy that I think I have cavities now.

I love how you characterize Alice. The last sentence and the first sentence of every little 'section' was wither heart-warming, or heart-breaking.

Layout is lovely, and amazing, and I love it<3

I love your diction (: using words like 'dainty' made my day.

I am now fangirling all over this story :D

rofl, it would be funny if bella was les

i really liked this (:
and I agree with Nytestalker on everything she said.

I think she is though!
She's much to indecisive to be permanently attractive to men.
Sad but true.
And it makes sense that shed be with Alice given their 'friend' chemistry.
Overall, LOVE.