I agree with the above comment completely. Bitter-sweet is the best word to use to describe it, and it was simple and easy to understand.
Constructively, the only thing I can recommend would just be to add in a few nice descriptive sentences here and there to really show how shit the 'you' character felt. Otherwise, nicely written. Okay, job well done because the only error I spotted was you forgetting a " before Brian said 'but' at the end of the story. Other than that, there were just a few little grammatical things, but nothing huge, since it still all made sense.
I know you were probably expecting a huge comment about what to fix and what I liked, but I can't do it this time lol. There's barely anything to fix and I liked the whole thing, though no one line particularly stood out or anything.... All the best with the contest. You are an exceptional writer.
Constructively, the only thing I can recommend would just be to add in a few nice descriptive sentences here and there to really show how shit the 'you' character felt. Otherwise, nicely written.
Okay, job well done because the only error I spotted was you forgetting a " before Brian said 'but' at the end of the story. Other than that, there were just a few little grammatical things, but nothing huge, since it still all made sense.
I know you were probably expecting a huge comment about what to fix and what I liked, but I can't do it this time lol. There's barely anything to fix and I liked the whole thing, though no one line particularly stood out or anything....
All the best with the contest. You are an exceptional writer.