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  • iheartmusicx3

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    i like it!!! (:
    can't wait for the next chapter!!
    February 7th, 2011 at 04:26am
  • lolamonito

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    You're idea is very original!

    Some criticism: Spacing. When someone first opens your story, that's the first thing they notice. Most times, if it's all one paragraph, they don't even bother. It's like a first impression. As goes for the layout. If it's not appealing, people won't take the time to read it. I would go back and fix the spacing for the first couple chapters. (:

    Another thing is grammar. Your writing style is very unique, I'll give you that! It's different from everyone else's writing styles. However, your use of grammar isn't always correct. Again, it's like a first impression. A lot of people on Mibba are very critical of grammar, and if it is not correct,they don't even bother. So capital letters, periods, commas, and quotation marks are all a must! If you ever need help with grammar, feel free to ask me. (:

    All in all, I do like your story! It is very unique, and it has a good story line! Keep writing! :)
    February 6th, 2011 at 06:20pm
  • MyAngel

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    Love it!!! Cameron is gonna kiss her!!! But hey people fall for Cameron, I mean look I did!! She sounds cute with Zach and Cameron. Who will she pick? Haha so update soon! :)
    January 27th, 2011 at 05:48am
  • ALLSTARLOVE333

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    hahahahahahah what will she say?!?!?!?!?!?! more soon please I wanna know what she says or doesn't say :P
    January 27th, 2011 at 04:53am
  • ALLSTARLOVE333

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    dundundun AH can't wait for the next ch :P
    January 25th, 2011 at 04:57am
  • brbcharmed

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    I love it so far!!! Please update soon. I wanna find out what happens next. :) Cant wait till the next update. :)
    January 23rd, 2011 at 05:32pm
  • ALLSTARLOVE333

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    aw CUTE!! love the date wish someone would feel that way about me :P w/e anyway LOVE it can't wait for more :D
    January 20th, 2011 at 02:47am
  • mich3ll3allstar

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    OH no... please no fight seen please no fight seen *crosses fingers* please NO fight seen please NO fight seen. <3 it so far :)
    January 15th, 2011 at 04:11am
  • ALLSTARLOVE333

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    o gosh Zach really you had to go and do that UG STUPID should have askef me out lol JK (about the should've asked me out part) anyway LOVe IT more soone plz
    January 14th, 2011 at 01:58am
  • MyAngel

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    Love it!!! pleasa update as soon as possible! Oh, and I am going to subscribe!! :)
    January 13th, 2011 at 03:58am
  • ALLSTARLOVE333

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    Amazing more plz!!!
    January 12th, 2011 at 10:29pm
  • pinkxhearts3

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    <33
    January 12th, 2011 at 08:02pm
  • ALLSTARLOVE333

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    he couldn't sleep because he was thinking of her can't sleep tonight :P AW so cute!!! :D LOVE IT AND CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE!!! :D
    January 12th, 2011 at 02:49am
  • ALLSTARLOVE333

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    you know I love you, and you know I LOVE the chapter other than the Taylor Swift stuff... Sorry I don't like her but I don't hate her either ANWAY LOVE LOVE LOVE IT Please post more soon :D
    January 11th, 2011 at 06:43am
  • ALLSTARLOVE333

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    AH I know sorry for commenting again but now
    i read the new chapter!!! LOVE the way you spelt Mady... :P most people don't spell it that way :P only I do :D AH LOVE YOUR STORY and dude getting more and more intersting by the word LOVING IT!!! AH can't wait for more :D dude you already know this but you are aMAZING!!! :D love ya :)
    January 11th, 2011 at 05:16am
  • ALLSTARLOVE333

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    LOVIN' IT!!!! AHAHAHAH So hapy you told me about this... I commented so PLEASE POST!!! Lovin' it :D Love ya <3
    January 11th, 2011 at 04:49am
  • alwaysallforyou

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    One thing I recommend is spacing out the conversations, separation in paragraphs because this is lacking grammar. I know a lot of people who won't even read a really good story if it doesn't have grammar. So for example, capital letters at the beginning of sentences, use of commas, and spacing out their conversations. Like when Zach talked and then she talked you should separate it all into different paragraphs. I hope this advice helps(:
    And I also hope you like my story?
    January 10th, 2011 at 10:16pm
  • alwaysallforyou

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    I really would like to see where this goes(: Are all of the chapters going to be this short?
    January 10th, 2011 at 01:43am
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