Just a Dream - Comments

Ahhhhh, this was amazing. I really, really enjoyed it. It's so descriptive, which I fully enjoyed, even from the very beginning. And it makes me crave more. It's so mysterious! Don't edit or cut anything at all, the details and the tone of this piece makes it all the more interesting. I completely adored it. Best of all, no grammar or spellig mistakes!

The layout is so cute. :D

Slightly confusing, mysterious, well written and it flows well...I think I've found a new author to stalk. I'm going to go check out some of your other stories, if you have some.

Adorable layout :)
I really loved the theme and idea of this. It's so dreamily perfect, but it's serious and tragic at the same time, and you do a great job of blending the two.
I did feel that you were a bit overdescriptive at times, mainly in the very beginning, but at other points I thought you had some really marvellous description...so maybe I just needed to warm up to it like watchtower said.
Awesome job!

I really enjoyed this. The whole unreal dream effect really, really made this oneshot strong. Instead of just describing an average, unreal dream, the fact that it was so bizzare really helped establish the mood for me. The only critism I can say is that in parts, I felt that the description was too elaborate, and that you could have cut out some parts to make what you wanted to say more direct. That didn't detract from the mood of this piece though, and it was wonderfully well written!

I think is a brilliant piece, I loved the dream effect, it really added to the whole piece.
I think your writing style is wonderful, and this piece is a really unique and amazing piece.
I especially loved the layout.
Well done!

When I was first reading this, I found a little too pretentious, but I got the idea that your flowery wording added to the dreamy effect of this story. It was quite clever and made me like the style of it that much more. It was really nicely written, you have a way with words and you're clever is creating an atmosphere and introducing a theme. Great job!

Wonderful short story, I must say.
As weird as it was, I felt like I was there.
Very descriptive, very well done.
:)