I love this, it's very powerful. You've done a really good job on showing the narrator's worry and care for the girl who's annorexic. The first few lines work really well to establish the girl's ED, and it portrays the emotions really well. The layout is very effective. The picture you've chosen is amazing, and fits in so well. The alignment of the text is a strange choice, and would normally put me off, but it manages to work (possibly due to the short length) and it almost seems like poetry.
This is wonderful. It's so short, but it's go so much emotion. I seriously love everything about it. It was written really well, and I enjoyed reading it.
The layout is very effective. The picture you've chosen is amazing, and fits in so well. The alignment of the text is a strange choice, and would normally put me off, but it manages to work (possibly due to the short length) and it almost seems like poetry.