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  • Modern.Sunshine

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    I've read up to chapter 15 and I'm not sure if I can read anymore. The chapters are too short and there is no order to them. The events are completly random and as a reader it is quite frustrating =/

    I like the plot of this story its just that you need to elaborate with more detail and sentences.
    consider re-writting this.

    oh and also consider using a little BBcoding aswell, hun
    April 1st, 2011 at 01:13pm
  • LittleMissZombie

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    This. Is. AMAZING! This is an azmaing story! Well done!
    March 1st, 2011 at 06:00pm
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