January 16th, 2011 at 03:29am
Hmmm...it's very intriguing; I do appreciate the oriental scenery and details in this so far.
I can practically feel the tranquility and calm of the place as I'm reading this.
I have no idea where this story is headed, it's full of mystery but I think that's great. =)
I really liked it!
Grammar is a bit shaky in some parts, and the dialogue could be a little more natural - I'm not saying it should be any less formal, as that fits the setting, but sometimes it seems a bit stiff and forced.
Other than that, beautifully written. I look forward to more.