A Story Of Love, Life, And Never Giving In - Comments

i love it,especially the description you put into the dream and all the dialogue works well. The little brother is such a sweetie, i love the characters. the only thing is the picture on the layout goes a bit funny but thats all really, its great. keep writing i love your writing style :-)

ew pedophile...
why is Travis so sweet? why, oh, why?

oh my Travie <3
he's the best.
Jack can lick my wang.
keep going with this, yeah? &hearts;

I like the rewrite, and I can't wait to read what's next!
Ben is cute :) he reminds me of my little brother - except I'm lucky that mine doesn't have cancer.
Please don't let him die :( I like him already!

I like this!
Please update soon, or I'll show up on your doorstep wielding a blunt object.
c:

Oh, and just one more thing... can you make longer chapters? I don't want them to end so short!

Yay an update! :D
So, the first thing I noticed is in the first line "I came down the stairs two at a time, anxious to beat Sam Mario Kart." it should be "anxious to beat Sam at Mario Kart."
Probably just a minor typo, but I thought you should know :P

"I recall the first time I seen her."
seen can't be used by itself - it should be "i had seen" or "i saw".

And speaking of which - I noticed you go back and forth in between past tense and present tense. Since this story is mainly told in past tense, stuff like "Lately the way she's been acting around me had me thinking...." should be "Lately the way she'd been acting around me had me thinking..."

But other than that technical stuff, Travis better save her, or I'll just die :(

aawwwe yay :) im very very glad you liked it, i was waiting yo hear from somebody who liked it for me to update i mean whats the point of a story up if nobody will read it?
i promise ill update so subscribe and get an email when i do ;)
her name is jaana but its pronouced yawna . :p
Im still looking for pictures of everybody else
And please if you have any comments do tell me :)
Soon ill have a story up its an andy sixx fanfic ?
He turns into a puppy :3

First thing's first, Travis is A-D-O-R-A-B-L-E and the rapist guy is really creepy. Why aren't Sam and Janna (or Yawna or whichever her name is :P) up? But anyway, I like this story so far and I think you should definitely update soon.
Your writing style is cute. I like it. :]
I don't understand why there aren't any comments on this story yet. I found it while browsing through profiles and the title made me curious (because I love Black Veil Brides) and I thought this was going to be an Andy Sixx fanfiction. But when I found out it wasn't I actually kept reading.
Anyways it all boils down to the fact that I think you should keep writing, and please update soon.