Wow...this story has really caught my attention...i can't for the next update...i hope its soon...!!! :] this aaron guy is really complicating stuff up...but i love the TWIST...it just made the story 10x more original...!!! :) and troy seems like a cool guy but totally has his pms/pansy moments....i love the main character...i know if i was in half the situations she's in...i'd do the same thing...and RUN...!!! anyway im off topic...the next update should be awesome and i can't wait..!!! *subscribed*
The story and dialoge are great. The only critiques I have are proofread and maybe extend the sentences and widen the descriptions. Other than that it was really very good and I shall subscribe.