I Never Meant to Start a War - Comments

This is such a great story. Paul is the one for her though. You never know, Jasper could be unintentionally putting loving emotions in her, or making them more prominate because when she's with Paul and I mean with her walls down she doesn't think of him, and she never has her wall fully down with Jasper.
Can't wait for more!

April 18th, 2011 at 07:36pm

Laur-Farrah (100)

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Do love this. :)
Keep up the good work!

April 12th, 2011 at 06:16pm

Art_Flavor (100)

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Wow.
What is Jasper going to do?
Update Soon

April 10th, 2011 at 09:14pm

glamorously (100)

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omg, best chapter so far.

April 10th, 2011 at 09:06pm

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I don't want to give you a grammer lesson and I'm not going to, but I did notice you used a lot of -- (dashes), they usually substitute for the semi-coln ;. And in the form you're using them in, you have a few unnecessary ones in your updated chapter. So try not use dashes to set apart material when commas would do the trick for you.

Oh, and this '?!' isn't correct, even though you might see a lot of people do it. Try and find other ways to emphasize what you want to say. Other than that, keep up the imagination. (ha, that sounded lame)

{: peace

April 7th, 2011 at 12:18am

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I'm not huge on twilight but I stumbled onto your story on impluse and I am quite suprised at myself, liking your this twific that is. Honestly, you right pretty well and I think you deserve more comments than just 8 not including myself. I hate silent readers, eh, but what can you do. Though, I myself don't fall into the twi hype, I fail not to like I Never Meant To Start A War. Good Job, I look forward to reading more{:

April 4th, 2011 at 05:25am