If You Run - Comments

This sis a good story. There a just a couple of grammatical and spelling errors. Firstly, modeling is not spelled with two l's. Secondly, when a verb has an -er ending, it implies the word "more". To say more faster or more louder is redundant. The same goes for -est endings with the word most.

Wow, Darcy. That was actually amazing.
I loved the characters. Like, Alice was amazing (and had an amazing name), and so was Joshua. I loved how they were practically complete opposites in nature, although I definitely preferred Alice. She was so strong but she had all these hidden things that made her seem so much more realistic. Like her reasons for being bitter, and the way she obviously cared for her dog more than people, which made me smile. I also loved her letter to Tina: Your mum called just to say she’s so glad she hasn’t heard from you, literally made me practically cry with laughter.
I loved how you fitted the song into the story, like actually made it about the song. It was clever and original and just brilliant.
I also loved the ending; you know that I'm a sucker for happy endings. And this was just so sweet. And incredibly sexy at the same time. ;)
I loved reading this. Thank you for entering and it was just, gah, amazing. :)
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amazing :)