Just Breathe - Comments

Hm... Update?
& As for the font, if you could change it to something a little less bold, then it would be easier to read. Thanks<3

Major WTF! Yeah, they shouldnt be together. He and his family are killing her! His father and brother are totally right that they should be together. She doesnt deserve an asshole like him.

oops i fell behind in chapters and i just caught up
so i kinda gonna go on a rant

mannn im so mad at avery for putting up with nathan
im almost more mad at her than i am at him for being a jerk >:/
cheating, lying, and hitting?
ugh erfhewklfsneklr it makes me so angry that she thinks its because she isnt perfect
also (going back a few chapters)
he cheats on her but freaks out when she is with sean rgk;jbrkjrs
like avery would cheat on nathan in his house
(if youre going to cheat on someone... their house isnt the best place hahaa)

moving on...
1. i dunnnnooo i just hate him.
2. i dont know yet if i should be happy or not....
3. Becca. No. because i hate her. Sean. Yes. because the way things are going i think that avery needs a break or something
4. um no not yet just keep writing and ill keep ranting :D

love this story yhhu shuld keep writing i like the dad in the story and i think in the story when the story sister comes back she going to have a change of heart

she's so skinny. that's horrible. :( nathan is being stupid, and needs to care more. :(

I love this! :D
But to improve, like TripleThreat pointed out, I would change the font because it is rather hard to read.

:) the only thing i would suggest you fix is the font cause its really hard to read:(

1. Honestly I would love any kind of drama except for another girl coming into Nathan's life because I hate love-triangles.
2. I think Mrs. Kelsay should pick up on her being anorexic after she maybe starts to like Avery more and try to help Avery understand she has a problem. (really I just want her to have a mother figure because it seems like her mother that adopted her is never around)
3. I read the comment above and I LOVE the idea of Avery passing out while she's exercising and Nathan freaking out.

that's all for now :D
Keep up the awesome chapters!

I love this chapter! Poor Avery... :P
1. I think the anorexia should push Avery away from Nathan and he notices this and takes it quite hard.
2. Mrs. Kelsay should just ingore Avery at first and then slowly warm up to her...?
3. Within the next few chapters, Nathan starts to notice Avery's not-eating and excessive workout. Maybe she can pass out while on the treadmill or something? :o

Thanks for updating! (:

i really like the way this is starting (:
i think you have got yourself a permanent fan

Love this! Love Nathan! :) When are you going to introduce her anorexia? Update soon!

I like this. It's a good story I think. The only thing that bugs me is how mean people are to Avery. And at the fact that she does nothing about it. Anyways. I subscribed. I'm interested in reading more.