While Trees Sing - Comments

The first chapter is really... entrancing / alluring with a touch of mystical. Gah, you wrote it so elegantly. And I actually did listen to the song choice you put at the bottom, it really did give it that more 'hidden foresty' feel, which I love [nature and whatnot].

Aw, It's always sad to see family problems/arguments. However, I like how Tethera has a sort of sanctuary or getaway. And the fact that it's a tree. I really do have a soft spot for nature and animals and the like, so this definitely peeked my interest. I honestly have no idea where this story will go, yet I'm still intrigued by the events that may occur in Thethera's life. Great job here :')

Oh my gosh, the first chapter is amazing. Every little detail just creates a new world in my mind and I feel like I should be outside in nature. I think you’ve really captured the beauty of the forest. I listened to the link you gave while reading and I think it really added this magical effect to the whole thing. My favorite line was this, “Blood stained muzzles gaze up to the sky with wild hearts, holding back the call of the hunt.” It brought a darker feeling to the story and gave me goose bumps.

The first line of the second chapter was definitely a dramatic change from the first but because of this it really got me to keep reading. I like the harsh reality of this story and how it’s all happening to such a young girl breaks my heart. However, it’s definitely unique because so many stories on Mibba focus on teenagers and it’s a nice change.

The last line was beautiful and I really hope you choose to continue this story in the future because it absolutely wonderful and you have a way with words!

First of all, I'm so sorry that I didn't get back to you sooner :( I'm glad that I finally managed to get some time to get back to people, haha! Anyways, I really like how you started this story off. Oh, and btw, the layout is absolutely gorgeous :3 I really like the first chapter. It's beautiful and amazing and lovely and...okay, I think I can go on forever. In short, it's a great start for this story. (:
The second chapter - er, first - made me so sad. Poor Tethera :( Family problems really, really suck and this just made my heart tear up inside. I like how she's still optimistic, despite what she goes through on a daily basis with her father and mother.
Okay, so I'm subbing to this. It's a beautiful story so far and I'm curious about what's going to happen in Tethera's life. Lovely job! <3

i really love your style of writing. please continue!!

Well, I vote you continue.

Family problems suck, but you have such a neat way of portraying them. The little girl makes me smile, ignorance truly is bliss.

Sometimes I felt like things were worded awkwardly,

It was a place where no one would dare to even think of interfering with anything that sounded like risking their own sad souls for another's which they would think to be below them

Maybe it should be they thought it below them instead?

Really, really, lovely. :)

Oh and I would love some feed back on Sip.. sigh and/or the whisper in the dark if your feeling up to it thanks :)

I love the descriptions and it's different.
I think you should write more, please?