I'm With You - Comments

Mebbe I shouldnt have read this since it's the third in the series, but I liked it. Not exactly my type, but I liked it. ;)

That was so adorable. :)
I don't know that much about Gerard but I have to say. It was very sweet.
I really enjoyed it. I didn't see any grammar problems.
great job! XD

I portrayed Gerard as Gerard, not anyone else but him. Gerard is my safe place. He may not actually be here but he still manages to comfort me when no one else can whether that's through my writing or his music or just me imagining a conversation with him. Gerard is portrayed in the story as what I need. I need someone to comfort me and be there for me and to understand and be supportive. Each one of these stories in the collection were written after something happened where I felt like I needed someone like Gerard but didn't have anyone. Writing these stories has helped in a way.

this was a very interesting story. I mean its almost like you're portraying Gerard as me cause I'll love you no matter who bad things get <3 <3 <3

Okay, this is so cute and sweet and I adore it. <3

The colors of the layout work well together, but it was a bit hard to read at first. My eyes adjusted though, and then it was easy.

Your way of wording things, and your imagery, they're lovely. There's so many cute little lines and gorgeous little descriptions. And you make Gerard seem so real - I've never met him, but he seems like he'd be the kind of guy you portrayed.

The relationship was beautiful. I like how at the end he was just being so adorable and so kind and I want that in my life. It's so innocently romantic. That's what I love in a story.

One error: "you're talking to here again..." in the beginning.

This is lovely. I adore it. <3

I really like the layout and the description is really good.
Not many word errors.
I love it .

I like this alot.

Firstly, I really like the colours of the layout. They all look very nice together and match very well. However, at first, I found the text a bit difficult to read on the black background. It got better as my eyes adjusted to the tones, though.

I adore some of the imagery you use. The one that sticks in my head is, "he’s the band-aid in the relationship." I found that to be particularly inventive and interesting, particularly as the story that you're writing, I presume, is a BANDfic, therefore the link between a plaster (as we call them here in the UK) and the group of musicians was fantastic, whether intentional or not.

I love the way you also portray the relationship. It's so sweet, at the end, as he helps her to dance. It's such a lovely image to leave your reader with, especially when you say that they "swayed to music that wasn’t there." It's very tender and romantic, with just a little hint of eroticism.

Just one little error that I noticed in your author's note was that you said it was a drabble - technically, a drabble is 100 words exactly, or anything less than 600 words. I think you might be thinking of a wordspill (a spontaneous, spur-of-the-moment piece).

It's really, really good.