Control This Ride - Comments

Eh, Brian's not THAT old. If he was 60 I would be SCREAMING about him being a DOM, but he's kind of sexily older. And I can say that 'cos I'm a very young 19. Ahem. Moving swiftly onwards. Loved this chapter; loved getting to know more about Mitchi - even if it was through Brian's eyes. And really enjoyed watching it all from Brian's POV too. He's a very canny bloke.
I have a slightly awkward point to bring up - some of your spelling's a bit interesting. At one point you say "fiest my eyes", maybe "feast"? I don't want to be mean or patronising but God knows if someone's going to report it or you get told off for it officially and that would suck balls. Cos this story is awesome.
On a nicer note; I'm really glad you're updating this story. It's a really brilliant story and I love reading it so much. The characters are all really in your face real and it's just got this real true ring to it. Much like you're other stories; despite Brian being an 18th Century ghost in one of them, lol.
Please post more when you can, you're so good at it!!

Possibly one of the best stories I've read, loving this so far! I can't wait to see how dinner goes :D

Amazing update! I really feel sorry for her now.

love it and can't wait for more :) Brian a dirty old man...hahaha lol and i can't believe that they were basically the same thing for halloween.... though it is to be expected.... anyway like i said love it and i can't wait for an update :)

i love this shit! if u need a gf for any of the guys i wanna be first in line lmao!! my fave part was the batman talk at the party, seriously i laughed for like 10 mins straight and the soap smell part was hilarious! i LOL'd for 5 mins haha love scenes like that

AW! Cute. I loved it. :D

the suspense is killing me by the way. i just want them to do it already!!! hahaha.

I fucking love you. You made my Sunday night. She's so awesome. And he's so funny. And RAWR for Frankie and Zackie (how cute!!)
I can't actually get out everything I want to say because, on the inside, I'm "SQUEE"ing at dog hearing levels and boucing about like I'm on a bouncy castle on the moon. Sooo yeah, eloquence ain't my thing right now.
Anyway; please, more when you can? Because you love us and we love you? *flutters eyelashes*

So she took Friday off, then it was the weekend, then you stated it's Monday when she got back to school, so then Brian shouldn't have said "We missed you yesterday", right? And you put [/ur;] at the end instead of [/url], just so you know.
But otherwise, liked it, as you already know. :) I have nothing else to say, really.

I sooooo need to read more!!!!!
im like addicted to this story!!
ur so freakin awesome at writing... i sooo cant wait until the next chapter is posted.
XD
more please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Brian going back to the batman voice was probably my favorite part of this chapter! :) He just thinks he's so cool. Well, maybe because he is, but still. I so loved this.

Fail on the Tumblr link...
So. I mean. Will there be anymore hate?
Cuz you know I enjoy Brian hate.
I still enjoy Zacky. :3
You're awesome. I'm just putting that out there. <3

(sorry for my lack of amazing comment. :/ )

Really liked this chapter. And the tension begins!

OMFG!!!
i only got to read part of chapter one but i was seriously hooked XD
I believe the best way to get ppl to like ur book is a great first few paragraphs... n chu totally accomplished that!!
I will sooo read more n i already subscribed!
it sounds sooo f-in good i really cant wait, keep up the work plz!!!
XD
oh, snap, i just comment raped ur story without even realizing... how do chu like it? XD

Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm. That was hot. Very hot. I liked it. I like also that Brian wants her attention now. I think this might get funny. In a kinda painful way. That kinda have to keep watching painful way. You know what I mean even if I can't get the words out right.
Loved Zack's response...classic. What a man, lol. I feel the need to say "this is why Hallowe'en parties aren't a good idea". But they are. No other time of the year is it OK to play games like Spin The Bottle dressed as a demon. Not that I've done that. No. Never. *cough*
More soon? Please? And before you say you like my comments; I practically live for your chapters. So I reckon we're quits. Yes? Lol. :p

Update soon please! :)

I just gotta point out the title written on Brian's face is really annoying me lol. Can you not move it down and make it black so it blends into the background?
Oooooohhhh.... Brian as Batman.... I do like that image.... Lol
No con crit. Everything was good and enjoyable to read.
Good job and can't wait for more :)

chapter 9 plzzzz this story is realllyyyreallyyy gooodddd

Whoa, man, whoa.
That thing where I was all like "WOO. GO LANE FOR BEING A BITCH TO BRIAN!"? Yeah. Cheering over. She kissed him. We are no longer able to be friends. :l
BUUUUUUT.
You and I can still be friends. Only cuz you didn't make Johnny the dwarf. :3
And you do write some pretty kick ass stories that make me feel awkward things towards certain lead guitarists...
<3

wahh! they kissed! :DD
yay!
cant wait for more