Perfection - Comments

Thank you all and I will be sure to do some editing soon :)

I like how the layout seems like an extension of the stick person, in a way. It's simple, black and white, and not too intricate - just like a stick man. Very, very, cute, and I love how easy is to read. Lately, it seems people have this need to make their layouts so bright and such, but I'm glad you did not. I won't have to switch to the default and enjoy the stick person in all his glory. :) He's quiet the looker, hehe. <333

Honestly, in the summary, the first few lines bored me. Not your detail, just that things are so gosh darn perfect. Perfect is boring. I know this story probably needed that detail, but still. My interest wasn't caught until the second part where something was found to be wrong with that perfection.

Chapter One

I like the title of this chapter. Tulips are really pretty sounding and a gorgeous flower. :) <33

She favored them above all others.

All other what? Flowers? People? Animals? I felt like pointing it out because it seems like your thought CD skipped a beat, aha. Just saying.<333 (:

or defend themselves by saying

defend should be defending*.

In all honesty, and I hope this doesn't sound rude, I did not like being slammed with so much information in the very beginning. I didn't particularly care for a life structure lesson or an education in how the perfect people live their lives. I came for an escape to perfection. It may have been nessecary to your plot, but as a reader, I'm going to be honest and say it bored me a little.

On the other hand, I really did like this idea. I liked that even though the world was supposed to be "Perfect," there were quite a few flaws in their reasoning and their balance. It leaves a nice bit of room for someone, let's say Tama, to come along and shift the weight of that balance, which I do believe she'll do.

I like the idea of this story. You're a talented writer and this story shows a lot of potential. I didn't find too many errors, but I'd do a once over for grammar just in case. I'm really and truly glad I got to read this.<33 It's really interesting and impressive. :)

Wow, I really like this.

First of all, the layout is so simple that it's just perfect. It suits the story perfectly and the blankness of it really reflects the uniformity of the world everyone lives in.

May I just say how much I adore all the names you've used? They're all slightly quirky and unusual, but they also sound very natural - not unfeasable for people to be called things like that. Also, they sound so pretty to read.

I find the idea of this life, one that's almost prescribed for all the residents of Tay, one rather interesting to contemplate and investigate. You explore the idea really well during the story and seeing how it affects Tama and Aria and everyone else in the way they live their whole lives is extraordinary. It's actually quite a philosophical idea - what's right and what's wrong and who or what decides this?

It's great! Really well-written, interesting and inventive.

Aww <3 Finn <3

So, did The Seven mean to kill Peter ?

I kneew something like that was going to happen !! <3

OMFG.
I don't know what to say! I'm speachless by your words! :O :D
The only word I can tell you is; UPDATE!

NOW I'M PISSED OFF. ARIA, IMMA KILL YOU!

HOLAY SH*T!
WHAT A CRAZY B*TCH!
--> Sorry I get a little dramatic with writing and reading ;P

OMFGOMFOMFOMFOMF
NOO MF*CKING WAAY!?!?!?!?
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
ARIA IS CRAZY! CRAZY! CRAAAZY!

WHO IS IT? WHO IS IT? IF IT'S HER DAD I'M GOING TO FLIP OUT! BUT IT'S PROBABLY NOT!
^I'm a capslock abuser. (:

Aww! <3 Loove it sooo much, ps, I LOVE the layout to, so simple and.. perfect! Haha <3 (:

This is completely amazing. I can't wait for the next chapter, I'm subscribing now.

Ooooh.. it's starting to heat up !

:O !! Noo. Waay.

LOVED IT ! *SUBSCRIBES*

oh comment virginity taken (I feel like a rapist) -_-

well any who I love it all I can Imagen the girls there the perfection

in humanity still it is bad to be different

subscribing now