Magick - Comments

I thought it was really great maybe felt it ended too soon or could have been lengthier with the plot twists idk over all I enjoyed it =]

I really enjoyed this story a lot!

Quite an interesting story you have here. I like to believe that you are a Wiccan and are in a coven. Either that or you're really smart about Wicca.

I like your story. Keep writing

:/ Wyatt is he ok?
Poor Jayce things are getting so rough for him :(

Yey.please write more

I love Wyatt, hes my favorite in this story :)

I really like this story and the way it's going. Wicca was a huge interest for me for a while and I love slash and magic so both in one story makes me really happy. :)

aw,so sweet cant wait for more

As much as I love this story (I've always wanted to join the Wiccan religion) I feel as thought it's jumpy and quick to the action. There's not much description as to what's going on, BUT I do like the story and I am totally subscribing.<3

Based on your first chapter I think that you jumped into it a little soon. More of an introduction to the characters and some development would have improved the first chapter. However, you have a nice layout, interesting names, and a good topic. This story has potential. You should provide more descriptions and a little more background to the party that is going on because it was a bit confusing when by the end of the first chapter, they were already going to it. You've got a good start though, with more descriptions it'll improve it even more!

I love this story

I also think there could be more character description and development... and less direct cliche-ness everyone likes cliches but the whole "prep guy prep girl" is over played too me or just bleh when stated indirectly it's like being lazy.

I'm loving this I'm not wiccan but I am pagan so I can relate and I think the layout is great :]

I think it lacked some figurative language/imagery and the flow was to direct. It got better as it progressed but could still use some work otherwise it doesn't come alive.

But I like the story and the plot so far <3 I subbed

I love this... xxx
Such a good beginning, deffinatly going to bookmark and read as and when i can xxx
All the names are so original, i love it.
Excellent huni

xxx

another great story, I never really understood wicca until I read this story and I really thought it was interesting. Also, I'm really diggin the romance between Wyatt and Jayce

ahh in the description are you talking about Cate T. the author of the sweep series? i love those books! they are my absolute favorites not many people have read them where im from theyr so freakin good im addicted. your stories great :) keep updating

please forgive my typing errors. i meant that i would curse you

if you delete this i will curse somehow... just kidding but don't delete it i'm really getting into the story

Hmm interesting story you got here.
I do like your layout, it's very nice.
Also the title is very unique. Love it!! <3

I can see this as a great story.
I love the characters you picked for this story.
I havent read to many stories with "Witches" and "Magic" in them.
Cause some..well I'll leave that topic...to myself. hehee

In some chapters, you could work on some of your descriptions cause some are a little short.

Keep up the good work <3

This is very easy to read. Like the person in the second comment said, there were a few parts where it was difficult at first to know who was saying what, but once I read over it, I was fine.

It kinda reminds me of when teen witch stuff was big in the late 90s/early 00s- stuff like Buffy and The Craft. You've picked a fun genre, and the story is very easy to get into, much like those other two guilty pleasures I mentioned.

I also like the way you anticipate when we as readers will have to suspend our disbelief, and deal with it preemptively. Like in this part:

"I heard you're having a party,” Camille, a popular girl, says to us at lunch. Rowa and I are sitting outside the school under a tree both munching on apples.

“We are,” my sister nods.

“Isn't that kind of weird? I mean you guys just got here.”

I was kind of wondering about that party thing, but you answered my question before I could get distracted by it.

Well done!