Florence O'Brian and the Boy Who Lived - Comments

Agh! Thank you, it's all fixed now. I can't catch all of my errors

On this line: "Even so, that is non of your business Florence!..."
non should be none and I am pretty sure there should be a comma before Florence.
That was the main thing that distracted me a bit from the story.
I will let you know if I find anything else (:

Thank you so much, do you remember where my mistakes were so I can go correct them? Again, thanks for the comment. I'm cheesing like a fool right now

For all the Harry Potter fanfics that I've read, this is an extremely good one. I like how you write. It is very descriptive without going overboard. I noticed a few grammar and spelling issues, but they were subtle and didn't get in the way of the story. You did a great job characterizing Florence. I am looking forward to seeing where this goes, so I am subscribing. (: